Good morning, all!
This week's prompt proved a little more difficult for me, and required a good deal more thought on my end. I had an idea on what story & characters I would be using, but instead of shooting out an amazing flash fiction that I could have ready on Wednesday (as my record has been for this linkup so far), I came up with an almost complete synopsis of what was a concept idea & is now a WIP I'm gonna work on for April's Camp NaNo. O_o EEEEEE!!! Kinda excited about it.
I know the whole Dystopian-story genre is kinda fading, trend-wise, and to me just seems old & overused, but I thought I'd dabble a wee bit in it & give me brains a break from my Fantasy WIPs. Maybe this will be the creative boost I need to pick those back up & actually FINISH the drafts. . . heheh.
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So, it's Week 3 of my Link-up! And today is the deadline for this week's prompt.
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For this week's story, as mentioned above, I used some of the same characters from last week's flash fiction---as well as a new character---from the same concept story. This is a dystopian idea set in a slightly familiar, yet quite different, future Earth. You can read the synopsis/blurb on my Camp NaNo project page HERE! (to get a better idea of what's going on) :]
I'm not AS pleased with this prompt result as I was with the previous two weeks', but it was still quite fun! And I hope it leaves an irresistible itching to know more. ;D First-person narrative is not a favorite of mine, but I felt it worked well with this prompt. . . I welcome critiques!!!
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And it’s my
fault.
Those schematics
should have never left my hands.
Another explosion
shakes the walls that are basically ginormous windows in the building
that had once been a high-end apartment complex. For me and Darrow,
it serves as a clear vantage point to watch my mistakes play out.
Forgive me,
Papa.
I want to shield my
eyes with my hands and curl up on the cold, hard floor. Because I
let him down. I let them all
down. He’d trusted me with his entire life’s work, and I’d
failed.
More debris fell to
the riverbed of one of England’s most prominent landmarks. An
example. Though we were too far away, I could hear the screams.
I was always too
trusting. And now countless people would pay for my mistakes. And
this was just the beginning.
Starting
with the Bridge.
.
. .falling down. . .
I
jump at the pressure on my shoulder and my eyes meet Darrow’s
before I quickly turn away. I’m sure my shame-red face displays
every raging emotion. As usual.
“This
wasn’t you.”
I
bite my lip, fighting the sudden onslaught of stinging tears his
words seemed to trigger. A scoff leaves my throat, nearly followed
by a blasted sob I manage to catch in time. “I beg to differ.”
Isn’t that what someone from the Bygone Ages would’ve said?
“Look.
You are not to blame.”
.
. .falling down. . .
I
appreciate his attempt to relieve my mind. To fix everything. But
that’s gonna be up to me.
A
tiny sequence of beeps signal Warrick’s code on our comm link.
Thankfully, Darrow answers. I don’t have the energy.
“Wick?
Go.”
“Looks
bad, D,” Warrick begins. His voice lacks the usual cheeriness I’d
come to expect from him. “And they were right. This was just the
start, we’ve intel they’re targeting all the major tourist marks
because it hits multiple countries through the deaths of the native
and foreign travelers. It hurts not just one nation, but multiple
ones simultaneously.”
Another
explosion shakes the abandoned building we’d claimed to observe
this horror show. Nothing of the beautiful bridge remains. I can’t
take it anymore. I look away. Because this one feels like salt to a
burn wound. A show of power.
“Via?”
Warrick’s
voice brings me back.
“I’m
here.” I realize Darrow’s hand is still on my shoulder as we
stand mere statues in this world-size chess board. We were just
dealt a check.
London
Bridge is falling down. . .
“You’re
not alone.”
This
time, I can’t hold back my tears. Even a sniffle escapes. Durn
it. How did these brothers become such close friends in such
little time? If I lost them too. . .
I
manage a choked, “Thanks,” and feel Darrow’s arm pull me
closer.
If
Warrick heard my little breakdown, he doesn’t comment, just says,
“Kolter suggested we regroup.”
I
feel Darrow stand up straighter. He replies, “Agreed. Pick us up
at the rendezvous, Wick. Let’s go home.”
“Understood,
see ya ETA nine minutes.”
“And
Warrick?”
I
look up at Darrow’s question, feeling his words are for me, as well
as his brother—but more for me. And I’m grateful for this
leader. For this family. His eyes, blue and piercing, hold mine.
“This
was a defeat—a tough one, to be sure. But we’ve many more
battles ahead, some we stand a good chance of winning and others,
maybe not. They’ve asked for a fight, and we’ll give them one.”
Warrick’s
manner seems to have gained back a fraction of his usual cheer, or
maybe it’s for my benefit. I hear the whirring of his engines in
the background. “Out an’ over, bro! You two be ready—ETA
seven minutes, fifty-five seconds.”
I
reach for my pack, but Darrow beats me to it. I don’t argue, but I
catch myself looking yet again to the billowing black smoke where the
bridge should have been. Should still be.
I
finally turn, but instead of heading for the elevator, Darrow is
there wrapping me into his chest. The cold I did not realize I was
holding on to began seeping away, and of their own accord, my hands
cling to the thick leather of his coat.
His
words are muffled in my hair, but I feel the warmth of his breath and
the clarity of their meaning clearly. “No matter what I say, I know
you’ll always blame yourself. But this was NOT you. Betrayal is
not something any of us can foresee, that’s why it is what it is,
and why it hurts so much. They took your work and used it in a way
it was never intended for.” His fingers find my chin now, and the
tears again break the dam I’d worked to repair. “That’s on
them, myshka. That’s on, them.”
It’s
too fresh a wound to let those words really sink in as the truth I
know them to be, but I nod for his sake. Perhaps someday I’ll
accept that. For now, I need his strength.
“Then
let’s turn this war around. It’s high time we became offensive,
don’t you think?” My voice sounds small as we turn to the exit
and Warrick’s waiting bird. At Darrow’s smile, my heart flickers
like a light trying to turn on and brighten. And the determination
in my chest builds.
I
know what I must do.
God
help the enemy. For they picked a fight with the best team of human
beans I know. And, not that I’m bragging, but I’m the one who
designed the formulas of the
reactor they
weaponized.
We
make it topside just as Warrick’s Battle-Hawk touches down. I
squint at the wind from the blades, but that building fire in my
chest gives me a spark of hope—a purpose—I needed.
We
may stand a chance. And that’s all I need.
One
chance.
My
fair Lady.
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I'll have a wrap-up post for this week going up later this afternoon or evening. Thank you for reading, and thanks to all who took part! There's still time to join in on this prompt! If you miss the link-up, be sure to put your link in the comments---I'd LOVE to read what you come up with. :]
Are you joining Camp NaNo this April? Do you have a new story idea laid out, or are you continuing a WIP this time around? I'd love to know!
I DID IT! I ACTUALLY DID IT THIS TIME! I will link it as soon as I post it, but I ACTUALLY DID IT!
ReplyDeleteAnd your “London bridge is falling down” prompt was SO AWESOME, Sarah!
YAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYY!!! Can't wait to read yours!! So glad you could do it, but seriously NO PRESSURE, girl. *^ - ^* <3
DeleteAnd thank you! *blushes* You are the sweetest! <333
Um EXCUSE ME. But this prompt is AWESOMMMMEEEE. The emotion was TANGIBLE. I could just feeeeel the despair seeping from the words. And Darrow and Warrick are back!!! :D That made me so happy! And now they have am awesome girl with them! This seems like the coolest threesome EVER.
ReplyDeleteI love how HIGH the stakes were. Like, the London Bridge literally falling down? DUDE. That is insane. o.o Also, the way you incorporated the nursery rhyme was epiiiic. I like how "falling down" was interwoven throughout. And then, THENNN the last line. Everything was so full of despair then BOOM! a spark of fire and hope. I LOVED IT. Like I said, the emotion in this one was just spectacular. You made me feel so many things in less than 1k words. GIRL. YOU HAVE MAGIC FINGERS.
BUT ALSO. This will be your WIP for CampNaNo? :O THAT IS THE BEST. And totally sounds like what happens to me. Every time I write something short, it wants to turn into like a whole series. It's bad. XD But EEEP. I love this! And I, personally, am still a fan of dystopian. I suspect it'll make a comeback. I think all genres have their off and on seasons. SO YES. GO FOR IT. THIS IS EXCITING!!!
***^ - ^*** <--FOREVER BLUSHING. EEP. Lauri! You are the SWEETEST!!! This comment just MADE my day. I'm so glad you think the emotion was real. Evan had to remind me that prompts are made for writing exercises & my bits of flash fiction DO NOT have to be perfect. ;D I needed that reminder! I was almost stressing over this one cuz it just didn't seem right at first. But overall, I'm pleased with how it turned out. It's helped me with Camp!
DeleteAwww, thanks!!! Glad you think so! I Googled all sorts of nursery rhymes to spark an idea, and this one just seemed to fit with my dystopian WIP. D'awww, shucks! *bashful wringing of hands* But I think YOU are the one with magic fingers!
Yeppers! I'm hoping so! I have NO layout, no character bank, and none of my original notes (I can't find them!) from when this idea first came to me, but I'm still gonna shoot for it come April! And you think so? That would be pretty cool! I suppose I was just getting a little tired of the typical kids killing kids & stuck in mazes & games & such. I'm trying for something a little different in this story. :] Thanks, dear girl!!!!!!!!!!
This was SO INTENSE. The nursery rhyme is so perfect and I loved the way it echoes through the scene. It was fun meet Via to and see more of Darrow and Warrick again!
ReplyDeleteOooh, you're doing Camp too! AND THAT BLURB. O_O This story sounds so intriguing and high-stakes and I kind of need it now?
Awwww, I'm SOOOOO glad you like it! *beams* Thank you! When I came upon the prompt & that rhyme popped into my head, I kept hearing it echoing throughout the short story & thought it'd be a great effect. :D Up until this point, Via's name has jumped to many different things (Kyte [her surname now], Tessa, and maybe one more), but since doing a Nickname post, I found Violaine/Via was the PERFECT fit!
DeleteYOU'RE DOING CAMP TOOOOOO???? AHHH! How did I not know this? I was accepted to the Taleweaving Tower cabin---where are you? :DDD
Awwww, you're the KINDEST!! I'll certainly do my best, but actually completing a first draft is my BAAAAAAAANE. My goal for Camp, at least, is to get a good start on this one!